I’m Hearing Voices Blogfest- Dialogue Introduction

The I’m Hearing Voices Blogfest (the brainchild of Angie Cothran and Cassie Mae) continues. This time with dialogue.  So far, it’s been a great opportunity to learn more about my characters.


Have two characters introduce each other using only dialogue—no backstory, no internalization, just dialogue between the two. Max 250 words.

I just went for it, script style.  

CLAIRE: What is this?

JEREMIAH: A painting.

CLAIRE: Like graffiti?

JEREMIAH: No… A painting.

CLAIRE: How do you get each swirl to match so perfectly?  How do you line it up?

JEREMIAH: It’s in the wrist.  You have to do it quickly. Wanna try?

CLAIRE: I can’t.

JEREMIAH: Of course you can.

CLAIRE:  No really.  I can’t.  I’m useless.

JEREMIAH: It’s easy.  Try it.

CLAIRE: Trust me.  I’ll ruin it.   

JEREMIAH:  It’s not like anyone’ll see.  No one ever comes through.

CLAIRE:  Then why do you bother?

JEREMIAH: I like it along the canal.  It’s quiet.  Still.  I can think.

CLAIRE:  Me too. It think it’s beautiful.

JEREMIAH: The water’s toxic, ya know.

CLAIRE: No.  Your painting.  I like it.
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31 thoughts on “I’m Hearing Voices Blogfest- Dialogue Introduction

  1. Aww, cute ending when Claire said she liked Jeremiah's painting. And I loved that Jeremiah comes to the canal to think and have some quiet time. I also loved the opening where Jeremiah points out it's a painting not graffiti?

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  2. As Justine says, it's very concise — which is great for writing a screenplay! I learned a lot about being more concise from trying to cut 10 pages off a screenplay.

    And in just a few words, you've managed to convey quite a bit about these two characters. I would definitely want to keep reading about these two!

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  3. I agree with Stephen! I felt totally chilled out while reading this, and even though on the surface it doesn't seem like much happened, it gave a very telling look into the characters. Lovely stuff!

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